(11-28-2017, 01:03 AM)newmodelno15 Писал(а):

(01-28-2017, 06:53 AM)LSHamed Писал(а): This is my first attempt to write some random lyrics: (wrote it in 1 hour)



"Pain at the river"



When all things comes together
When you're at the river
And the sky is crystal clear
And you want everything to disappear

From your mind..out of your mind
From your heart..out of your head


Make it vanish..make it stop "I said"
but my mind kept wondering what she said
Just enjoy the view..come out of the coma
but when I look at the rain, I keep remembering the pain
You can't hide your emotions at the river
Because what you feeling can fill up all rivers

My friend said: "Beat up your pain, come your shit together, you're still alive, don't be dead inside"
I said: "I feel like it's a dream, nothing is what it seem, I lost my hope, I just need to smoke"

Light up the fire..light up the seat
Light up the bone..to feel the heat

I left the view..I went to Zoo
I keep staring at a wall, Why? I don't have a clue
I tried to remember, oh the color is purple
I felt mad, I still fucking remember what we had!

God help me please, I got on my knees
Stop all my dreams, make me forget all my tears
Run through seas..Run from your fears
Run to madness, Run into my arms




Rate & have a nice day \m/

i like this a lot. 
at this part:
From your mind..out of your mind
From your heart..out of your head

i think you could say:
From your mind..out of your head
From your heart..out of your mouth
or something like that

I'm glad that u liked it, and you're right I wasn't comfortable about that chorus, so, I changed it to:

From your mind..out of your head
From your heart..out of your think